These days too many people maintained that helped by relying on doctors and medicines rather than by following healthy lifestyles. Do you agree or disagree.

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In today's era, it is true that higher positions are presently held by senior
people
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in many organizations.
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consider that adult masses would demonstrate better leadership, it is my opinion that seniors have more merits over the young in leading a company.
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with, it is generally difficult for the young to compete with the old in terms of experience. Those who have gained experience can more effectively manage to lead the company than those who do not.
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, a survey done in Delhi and it resulted that nearly 75% of posts or jobs are occupied by senior
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and 25% are filled by younger individuals because every organization
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see the experience of a candidate
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doing a selection. Another advantage of aged
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is that they are likely to receive more support from the
people
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in an organization. The senior
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are selected in past years and they are doing better performance
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can understand their colleagues better, Achieve more popularity, and have better relationships and coordination
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performing any task.
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will need more time to get professional in their work, making relations and coordination between employees in the business. In conclusion, I believe that posts should be given to senior members for certain reasons mentioned rather than the young.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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