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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information
of
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 the number of international
travlers
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travellers
 in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
Overall
, total travelers
incresed
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increased
for 15 years.
To begin
 with,
total
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the total
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 amount of
travelers
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travellers
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 are
incresed
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increased
 from 448.9 to 693.7
milions
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millions
million
.
Also
, the most popular place was
the
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Europe in all periods and the
least
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last
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 spot was the Middle East. Almost half of
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the travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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in
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apply
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each year visited Europe. The
secondest
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second most
 famous place was America, except in 2005. In 2005, the second
popular
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most popular
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 location was Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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. The most change of
visitor
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visitors
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 was shown in Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 and it
was
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increased almost
duble
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double
.
On the other hand
, there was a decrease in visitors
of
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 America in 2005. It
is
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increased until
in
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2000, but after
that
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 it went down slightly in 2005. From ieltsxpress.com, as time goes by, the number of people
traveled
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travelling
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 internationally increased and the best spot for
trip
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a trip
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 was Europe continuously through 15 years.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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