Some people think that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There are many important topics that most countries are faced with, unemployment especially for
school-leavers
is the biggest one. Analyzing Correct your spelling
school leavers
this
problem could show some of its effects on people
who mentioned, limited
job offers and not enough income are great examples. I will explain my statement and other challenges that may young Correct word choice
that limited
people
face in the essay. Joblessness is a major challenge for school leavers, who are forced to leave school or they did
it with their own desire. Poverty could be a good reason for leaving school and giving up higher education. Wrong verb form
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jobs
people
are usually hard with a bad salary in advance. This
might ruin their chance to continue their education. Although
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people
's desire and passion to study is a great reason, chances and way of living is
important for them as well. In today's world, many distractions exist that make young Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
distracted and hopeless. This
may change their lives and depress them. Younger who do not have a purpose in their lives and see everything as pointless. Lack of energy and physical activities are the other things that might have impacts on their mental health. In conclusion, unemployment is a really great challenge that countries should be worrying about. It is true that many challenges are important too, but this
could be the priority. The mental and physical health of youngsters should be concerned
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite