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The line graph presents information about the percentage of people who used the internet in three various countries over a period of 10 years.

The line graph presents information about the percentage of people who used the internet in three various countries over a period of 10 years.
The line graph presents information about the percentage of people who used the
internet
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 in three various countries over a period of 10 years.
Overall
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, from the ,figure
it is clear that
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 the proportion of
internet
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 users in each country saw a significant rise over the period shown.
Moreover
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, Canada experienced the fastest growth in
internet
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 usage. In 1999, the proportion of
internet
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 users in the USA was about 20%. The figure for Canada and Mexico were at about 10% and 5% respectively. In 2005,
Internet
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 usage in both The USA and Canada experienced significant growth to around 70% of the population,
while
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 Mexican
internet
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 users reached just under 25%. By 2009, Canadians reached a peak of almost 100%, compared to approximately 80% of Americans.
Also
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, there was a gradual rise in Mexicans only 40%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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