The news has no connection with most people’s life and it is therefore a waste of time for most of us for reading newspaper and watching television news program. What extend do you agree or disagree?

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news
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platform
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. The
news
has no connection with most
people
's life and it is
therefore
a waste of time for most of us for reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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and watching television
news
program
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programs
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. To a large
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I agree with the statement and my point of view regarding
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statement
explained
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in the following paragraph.
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the advantage of
newspaper
reading is that,
newspaper
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or television not only provide
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current affairs but
also
sharing
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informative messages
such
as job opportunities. It helps
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the
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folks to get
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job and they can lead
good
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life in
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society.
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, the
news
provide
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deatiled
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detailed
explanation about crimes
such
as robbery, rape and murder which helps
to
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the
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people
get awareness and they can take temporary precautions.
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,
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years ago cruel rape happened in Delhi after that women carry pepper spray whenever they go outside. Yet another positive
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of reading
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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is that
,
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it is not wasting our time because
,
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they provide lots of general knowledge it
help
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a to
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students in their academic. To
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, the questions are prepared for the government tests 15% of the question come from
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general knowledge.
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, the
newspaper
not only
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the
news
but
also
spreading
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some
advertisement
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advertisements
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. It
result
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to
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the
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people
get
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the
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information about new launch and
on going
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ongoing
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trend.
To sum up
, there are lots of merits for reading
newspaper
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or watching television
such
as
people
get the awareness about crime and latest
trand
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trend
therefore
,
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are
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connected with every
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life.
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