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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Other say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Now-a-days
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leaning
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learning
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 a new
language
 has become
trend
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. Many
people
 think that they need to learn
new
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a new
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language
 for
job
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a job
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 and
traveling
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travelling
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purpose
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while
other
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others
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 think, there are many other
reason
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 for learning
new
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language
. The argument of both sides
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 valid and I will discuss it in subsequent lines. On the one hand, when
people
 travel to another country they will have to learn their native
language
 in order to survive.
For example
 for asking address, during shopping and for buying groceries and for many other things, they have to communicate with locals.
Sometime
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 they luckily meet with locals who know their
language
 but
that is
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an exception
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.
Sometime
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 many
people
 travel to abroad for seeking better job opportunities. For
this
purpose
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 they need to know the
language
 of that particular county because in
this
 world there are many countries which do not accept
English
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the English
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language
 as an international
language
.
Sometime
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 they only hire those
people
 who have already learnt their
language
.
On the other hand
, other
people
 point out that there are many other reasons for learning different languages.
For
example
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 there are many
people
 who learn various languages for making friends.
Furthermore
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 they have to communicate and interact with each other for getting
the
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new information.
Secondly
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 now
people
 love watching foreign movies, dramas and songs.
Therefore
 they are passionate about learning
new
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language
.
Futher
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Another
 reason to
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way
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a way
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 of
this
 idea is they love to understand their idol's thoughts and emotions.
Thirdly
, there are many individuals who have a great passion to learn and understand
the
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different culture and their histories and in
this
case
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 the information about them is written in
the
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 native
language
. So, in order to get access to that knowledge they will learn their
language
.
Overall
, in my
opinion
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 learning a foreign
language
 is
good
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a good
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 thing. It helps us in many aspects like it will not only help us in
traveling
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 and working around the world but
also
 our moral needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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