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The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts how
people
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 accessed
news
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 in the country in question over the period from 2013 to 2017 at 2-year intervals. The vertical axis represents the percentage of
people
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,
while
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 the horizontal axis represents four different media. By far, the most noticeable feature is the dramatic rise in the
proportion
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 of those who got their
news
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 via the Internet on any device; it experienced a significant increase, jumping from 32% in 2013 to 41% in 2015 and
then
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 to 68% in 2017, more than twofold of the initial value in terms of percentage.
By contrast
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, the
proportion
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 of
people
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 accessing their
news
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 through traditional print publications experienced a significant decline, falling from 42% in 2013 to 22% in 2017, about half of the initial value in percentage terms.
While
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 the
proportion
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 of
people
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 using the television for
news
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 fluctuated around 70% in the period in question, the
proportion
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 of those who listened to
news
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 via radio held fairly steady at 30% over the same period
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, news, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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