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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#university #education #students
Tertiary
education
 plays a pivotal role in every individual's life . It is
certaainly
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certainly
 claimed that each and every
teachee
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teacher
 should have
a
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free access to higher
education
, I partially agree with
this
 notion , the points of which will be elaborated
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education
 .
Firstly
,
students
 will not need to endure any financial burden .
As these
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 days , higher
education
 is too expensive to afford ,
most
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 of the learners and their parents find it difficult to pay for their
tution
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tuition
fee
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,
Therefore
 , it will be beneficial for them if they will not be reluctant to pay for their university-level
education
 . To
examplify
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, owing to its unaffordable costs , some
students
 can not
enroll
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 themselves
for
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 tertiary
education
 .
Whereas
 , if
the
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education
will be
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 completely free in universities ,
this
 would lead to unattentive behaviour of certain
students
 , as they might not study as diligently as they would if they were to pay for their
tution
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tuition
fee
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 by themselves .
As
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for example
, learners could feel that there are no financial
boundations
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foundations
 on them so they can take as many years as they want to complete their degree . Eventually , it would put more burden on
government's
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 funds To recapitulate , free tertiary
education
 is beneficial in terms of reducing financial constraints for
students
 .
However
 , it might
also
 lead to
decrease
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 in the interest of learners in their studies .
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