Some people say that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying at home?

Some people argue that nowadays,
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are no longer necessary, in my opinion, I strongly disagree with
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to support my point of
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of the most important reasons why students must go to
school
for learning is that learning
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school
give more benefit than learning in home
school
because students can get socialization form
school
.
Children
can learn essential social skills,
such
as teamwork, communication, and problem-solving by interacting with their peers and teachers in
school
., it was revealed that in Thailand, almost
children
will go to
school
for studying and making
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.
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studying in
school
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to get socialization . Another reason to support
this
is the fact that studying in
school
is more potential than studying
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the
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To begin
with, the information on the
Internet
is mostly not selective,
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are
also
not suitable for
children
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the
internet
might lead
children
to misunderstand and learn in an unsystematic way. To illustrate
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, there is some evidence that
children
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,
As a result
,
children
can be psychologically vulnerable, and at risk of harming those around them. By way of conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that students must study in
school
because they can get socialization and
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in
school
and studying
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the
internet
can get misinformation and violent.
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