Some people say that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying at home?
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from
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give more benefit than learning in home school
because students can get socialization form school
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can learn essential social skills, such
as teamwork, communication, and problem-solving by interacting with their peers and teachers in school
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information
As a result
, children
can be psychologically vulnerable, and at risk of harming those around them.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite