The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportion of educators who were
being
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recruited in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that the percentage of both English and French language teachers started almost at the same point and fell dramatically in the first two years;
however
, it shows different movements for the rest of the period. In fact, the number of
english-language
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educators showed an opposite trend since its number went down significantly in the 6-year period. On the one hand, at the beginning of 2001, the percentage of
French-teachers
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French teachers
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started at 70%,
then
there was a significant decline to almost 50% in 2002.
However
,
this
figure rose substantially
then
remained constant from 2003 to 2006 and
at the end
of the given period,
the
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recruitment increased slowly to above 70%.
On the other hand
, similar
with
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the number of
French’s
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French
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Instructor
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Instructors
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, the proportion of
English-teachers
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English teachers
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in 2001 began at around 70%
then
it fell steeply to 40% in 2002,
although
between 2003 and 2005 it increased slightly by approximately 3%.
Finally
, the trend decreased to below 30%
at the end
of 2007.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • steady increase
  • growing demand
  • notable decline
  • budget cuts
  • student enrollment
  • temporary stabilization
  • policy adjustments
  • economic improvements
  • post-2005
  • long-term educational strategies
  • recruitment needs
  • budgetary restraints
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