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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that governments of wealthy countries should take more obligation for assisting impoverished countries in such areas. Now people are beginning to realize that development depends on the joint efforts of a large number of different groups.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that governments of wealthy
countries
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 should take more obligation for assisting impoverished
countries
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 in
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 areas. Now people are beginning to realize that development depends on the joint efforts of a large number of different groups. Personally, I tend to think that everyone should assist
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each other in difficult times.
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, it is well known that a large number of rich lands have an opportunity to help. What I mean here is that they are able to create distinct events in support of poor society. One of the main reasons behind
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 they have a wide range of facilities
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 they may pool their resources and improve lives in impoverished
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. A good case in point is providing jobs for qualified people from economically backward nations, so both sides can obtain mutual
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 and strengthened their relations.
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, it can
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 be argued that only rich
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 must be responsible.
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 poor nations should aim to become self-sufficient and do not attempt to rely on someone. Take
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 example, the situation with the
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 pandemic, when the entire world was going through financial turmoil and needed assistance.
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, poor
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 suffer enormously
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 the lack of a competent economy and proper conditions for life so what they should do is consider every single detail in the development of the country to escape
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 terrible circumstances. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that the optimum solution is to provide market access so the region can produce products and obtain regular income.

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