Some people believe that only the government can bring about significant changes in society, while others think that even an individual can have a lot of influence on society. What is your opinion on the above statement?

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In these globalized world, we the
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and we the
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have mutually reinforcing rolls and array of
people
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are give that only
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can invite better changing
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mean
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other
people
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claim that not only
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but one can
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bring change in
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in approaching segment ,both view and opinion will be analyse the for most reason why some human kind believe that only
government
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can convert Nation in better track because authority has power to substitute better terms for the citizen for the nation for the day may know how to control the country ifenation is dropping down not only that but administration can motivate youngsters to work hard for
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successful career by giving them various education schemes or giving them opportunity to study abroad by landing the helping hand
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if
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announced about financial support to needy
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or elderly
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or may provide more job opportunity breakdown the unemployment rich in country in
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way
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can help
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on the one hand a bunch of
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considered that a single can
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switch community to Superior part by performing that duty towards that country if an individual pay taxes on time or by doing social work for the surrounding already
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that gradually
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may achieve their goal the former reason if public will pay taxes and given period
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government
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can help the poor
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or me developed the nation where there is need
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if one student donate to Charity or joins social work or giving free education to poor
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in
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way poor kid may get basic education and it encourages them to learn more and may they achieve there goals. From my perspective, it is not only the duty of Administration but it is the duty of a human
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to support and contribute to a better
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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