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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Smartphones
 are part of modern life. Some
children
use
 their time on
smartphones
 and spend hours on them. In
this
 essay,
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 will describe whether
this
 is a positive or negative development. Nowadays, many parents give their
children
 a phone for many reasons. The common reason is they want to know the locations of their
children
. Not just for security, but many benefits of phones make life easier for
children
. In the modern area, every activity uses a smartphone, even in school, pupils learn to search for information for their assignments.
However
, they
use
 a smartphone for school stuff. The creativity of
children
 can be built from the internet.
For example
, the students get a task from their teacher to make a short movie about how to save the forest, and the pupils will find the idea from the internet to make a movie. It is a good development because the
children
 will be the future of a country's development and they should know about technology.
On the other hand
,
smartphones
 have drawbacks. Some
children
 do not
use
 their phones wisely. They spend hours on the negative side. Lack of parental supervision leads
children
 to download games and social media apps. A
game
 becomes an addiction for some young. They spend all their time playing a particular
game
. For illustrate, the
game
 teaches pupils how to kill and
use
 violence, and they bring the behaviour to a school environment. In some cases happened, in Indonesia, a student hit his friend because a
game
 inspired him. Another example because some social media do not have filters; the young can watch everything include sexuality content which is not appropriate for them. In my honest opinion, I agree that
smartphones
 have benefits for our
children
, but we need strict supervision of them and to make some rules.
For instance
, how many hours they can
use
 the phone and restrict their download settings. If
children
 can
use
 their phones wisely, they can get more positive impacts on their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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