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illustrates
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illustrate
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 the reasons for a journey abroad and
destinations
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their destinations
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of
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for
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them
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apply
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by
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UK residents between 1994 and 1998.
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 holiday was the highest rate of travelling in the period of the
quastein
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while
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 the lowest
number
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 of
people
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 had other reasons for their travel.
moreover
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, totally the
number
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 of
people
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 who wanted to travel to
western
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the western
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 were increase after a
marginally
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 decline in 1995.
according to
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 the first statistics, in 1995 the
number
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 of
people
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 who want to take a trip on holiday was about 500
people
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 lower than the statistic in 1994. ,
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additionally
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 these statistics show us the
number
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 of
people
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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in
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on
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 vacation grow up significantly between 1996
until
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and
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 1998.
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moreover
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the
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apply
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business and visits to friends and relatives were other reasons for the purpose of travelling by 3957 and 3181 in 1998 , respectively.
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, in 1994 most the
people
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 travelled to the
western
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 and it stood at just over 1900.
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also
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this
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 increased until 24519 in 1998.
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