Some people believe that television is a powerful educational tool. Other people believe that television is nothing more than mindless entertainment and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, individuals are separated into two groups. The first group believes that
TV
is
educational
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the educational
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thing which can improve our knowledge.
However
, the second group argued that television
enhance
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degradation
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of our brains and we become less intellectual. From my perspective, I agree with these two groups. So, in
this
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I will
further
explore
this
thought-provoking question. On the one hand,
TV
provides
for
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us
overwhelming
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advantages.
To begin
with,
TV
provides
for
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us
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huge amount of information.
In other words
, there are many
channels
on various topics.
For instance
, about nature, space, history and so on.
Hence
, we can gain useful information for ourselves.
Also
, on
TV
a lot of news
channels
.
Thus
, we always can be aware of everything that happens in the world.
Moreover
, many lectures , interviews and podcasts can be steam on
TV
too.
On the other hand
, we cannot underestimate the drawbacks of
TV
.
Firstly
, it is a lot of useless information which can fill our brains.
Secondly
, many
TV
channels
do not have censorship.
As a result
, these
channels
can give us harmful details which can affect our mental health.
In addition
, mass media so often shows fake or exaggerated info.
This
can cause stress in people.
For example
falsehood about war or
particular
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event.
Lastly
, one of the main reasons why many
persons
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claimed that
TV
is bad for us, considering that when we watch
TV
we do not read.
Nevertheless
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it can lead to awful consequences.
For instance
, become illiterate. In order
to conclude
,
TV
provides some disadvantages.
Conversely
, if
it
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possible to get over all drawbacks, there will be only the benefits that remain.
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