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Nowadays, the rights of young people are not respected. What solutions can you suggest?

#rights #people
Everyone should be respectful it does not matter if he is young or an adult.
For example
, many
people
 do not care about kids’ emotions in what they think or like. I have some solutions that maybe helps. First of all, fear is important for
people
 specifically for the young because, if they do not feel respected they will not become a great generation.
For instance
, my little brother sometimes has bad behaviour when
i
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I
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 try to understand why he doing that I realise he just had a bad situation in society.
Therefore
,
people
 must understand the consequence of their actions. I can suggest a view.
First,
we have to start with the environment of kids. To illustrate, his family, friends, and neighbours let them know that, the kid needs awe and love.
Second,
the public centres like his school and other places.
Finally
, the government can make a difference in that topic.
In addition
, they have to do an advertising campaign about consideration for the young is necessary. In conclusion, everybody must
appreciation
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 anybody even though young
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rights
  • respected
  • laws and regulations
  • protect
  • educational programs
  • awareness campaigns
  • safe spaces
  • express
  • opinions
  • concerns
  • participation
  • decision-making processes
  • access
  • healthcare
  • mental health support
  • skills
  • opportunities
  • thrive
  • chosen fields
  • culture of respect
  • inclusivity
  • society
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