Nowadays, the rights of young people are not respected. What solutions can you suggest?

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Everyone should be respectful it does not matter if he is young or an adult.

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do not care about kids’ emotions in what they think or like. I have some solutions that maybe helps. First of all, fear is important for

people

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specifically for the young because, if they do not feel respected they will not become a great generation.

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, my little brother sometimes has bad behaviour when

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try to understand why he doing that I realise he just had a bad situation in society.

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must understand the consequence of their actions. I can suggest a view.

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we have to start with the environment of kids. To illustrate, his family, friends, and neighbours let them know that, the kid needs awe and love.

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the public centres like his school and other places.

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, the government can make a difference in that topic.

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, they have to do an advertising campaign about consideration for the young is necessary. In conclusion, everybody must

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anybody even though young

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

rights
respected
laws and regulations
protect
educational programs
awareness campaigns
safe spaces
express
opinions
concerns
participation
decision-making processes
access
healthcare
mental health support
skills
opportunities
thrive
chosen fields
culture of respect
inclusivity
society

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Nowadays, the rights of young people are not respected. What solutions can you suggest?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion You should write at least 250 words.

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People use the Internet for medical advice and to do medical check ups rather than directly meeting with doctors in an office. Why are they using the Internet for this? Is it a positive or a negative development?