Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime .Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce these increasing levels of crime.To what extent do you agree/ disagree?
It is often argued that illegal activities are increasing day by day in some nations and the only solution for
this
is the availability of police in local areas. This
essay completely disagrees with this
statement because having strict policies along with
punishments and proper education can work far better.
Implementing new rules in states, and mentioning the consequences of not following them is one of the best ways to stop actions that are against law and order. If the constitution of a nation is strict enough that it forces people to think about a hundred times before committing any bad activity then
there is
only a few possibilities that one can be violent because the person has fear of punishment in his or her mind as well and nobody wants to put himself or herself in trouble. Change the verb form
are
For instance
, in ,Dubai there is a very less
crime rate because Correct word choice
lower
government
there is very strict and they Add an article
the government
are having
rigid punishments for unlawful acts.
Wrong verb form
have
Moreover
, the teaching of moral values in schools can also
help in the reduction of future offences. Anti-social behaviour can be controlled if social values will
become part of teaching because nowadays, the majority of people do not seem to be responsible towards society. Everybody just thinks about their own benefit even if they get it after Verb problem
apply
involving
in offending activities. Wrong verb form
being involved
For example
, In many ,countries people do not hesitate to become part of illegal activities because it gives them a huge amount of money and they usually do not have any emotion that is
beneficial for society.
In conclusion, structured policies and social values are one of the most powerful aids for countries to stop illegal exercise.Submitted by ramandeep1512001 on
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