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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that spending money on wildlife protection is pointless because we humans do not need them. I cannot entirely agree with
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, it is absurd to argue that wild
animals
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 have no place in the 21st century.
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, it is deplorable watching how
animals
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 live disturbing.
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, there is no persuasive reason to let
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 die out. We do not need to export or destroy every
last
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 square metre of land to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There is plenty of room for us to coexist with wild
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, which should be our aim. I am afraid I
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 have to disagree with the idea that protecting
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 is a waste of resources.
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, it is what we must do; our
animals
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 are most significant in our natural life. If we do not protect and disturb
animals
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, they will die, which will be the human fault. In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild
animals
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 should exist, and we should do everything we can to protect them.
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