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Today, many people rely on the internet to diognose and cure their own health poblems instead of seeing a doctor. Why is this happening? Is it possitive or negative development?

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In modern times, some folks depend on the online networking platform to analyze their fitness complications and recover them by themselves rather than determine an expert.
This
 is because free source
information
 is available on the
internet
 and
this
 is a negative development because it may cause chronic health problems in long-term situations. There are many reasons why
people
 choose the
Internet
 to recognize their diseases on their own
instead
 of consult to a specialist the
Internet
 contains a wide range of
information
 related to medicine and various diseases and
also
 it is free of cost, so
people
 search for their fitness obstacles on the
internet
 and identify by their own and try to
cure
 by purchasing medicine from the shop.
For example
, nowadays, many
people
 diagnose their
disease
 from YouTube videos and many other sources
such
 as various websites NCBI, NIC and many more where they search for their
disease
 and read
disease
-related context to recognize their
disease
 and
cure
 without doctor's consultation. Relying on the
internet
 to
cure
 health issues by own
instead
 of taking the help of a doctor is a negative development because much
information
 which is available on the
internet
 is not authorized and accurate.
Due to
this
,
people
 may be getting the wrong
information
 about their disorder and they may choose
an invalid
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an invalid cure procedure
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cure
 procedures and they might get severe health diseases, which may lead to death.
For instance
,
according to
 WHO, around 20% of
people
 who suffer from chronic cancer
disease
 are those
people
 who try to identify their
disease
 on the
internet
 and they die because of the wrong
information
 they read. In conclusion, some
community
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communities
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 depend on the
internet
 to recognize and recover
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from
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their fitness issues
by
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on
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 their own rather than taking help from an expert because the
internet
 provides cheap sources and the major negative development is
people
 get deadly
disease
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diseases
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due to
 late diagnosis.
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