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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of
students
 want to manage their
time
 by themselves. They require to choose when they need to study or let's say play video games and etc., (other leisure
time
 activities). It is agreed that managing your own
time
 resources is quite important or even compulsory. In my opinion, it is an important skill and it can make
students
 very responsible and motivated towards education. First and foremost, I concur to think that
students
 will be more responsible
about
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 their studies. From my point of
view
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 independence will make them understand their responsibilities, and what they should do for their
future
 life. I mean the certain tasks that
students
 need to accomplish. Once I
have
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read a statement about a woman that gave full
independency
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 to their children in every aspect of their life. The first few months they were naughty and did not
accomplished
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 their studies or chores, but after
the
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 certain period of
time
 they understood their responsibilities, and without any reminders did
everyting
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everything
 they had to.
Therefore
, they became more
reponsible
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responsible
about
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 their life, education and
future
.
Secondly
, it can make them more motivated towards studying. Because in
this
 case, they will define by themselves their tasks and manage their
time
, as I mentioned before.
For instance
, I like to be able to study when I want, not when my parents tell me. I know that
otherwise
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 I will not do that. I will not feel motivated enough for studying,
due
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 to
this
 reason my parents stopped telling me
anyting
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anything
 about my studies and
time
managment
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management
.
Hence
,
students
 need freedom
otherwise
 they will not do
anyting
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anything
, even if
this
 decision will contrast
to
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 their
future
 plans. In conclusion,
students
 do not need to be told what they need to do and when.
Therefore
, having the ability to manage your
time
 is quite an important skill.
Proabaly
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Probably
 in the
future
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 more parents will follow
this
 way of parenting their
offsprings
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • self-discipline
  • personal responsibility
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • peak productivity periods
  • real-world demands
  • effective time management
  • controlled environment
  • learning preferences
  • academic performance
  • potential drawbacks
  • misuse
  • procrastinate
  • frameworks and support
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