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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the reasons behind this trend? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge.

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In recent years, most
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developing countries in the world are facing
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problems, which is many of their professionals
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 the country in order to get better
opportunities
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 countries. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the causes of these issues and how to mitigate these situations.
To begin
 with, there are many reasons to lead these circumstances.
Firstly
, many high-skilled workers do not satisfy with their
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. The income is not at par with
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 dedication and effort, they have put out.
For example
, in a village, the teachers are
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 to give their knowledge to the children but they only get paid for 800.000 Rupiahs.
Moreover
, professionals
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lack
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 compared with fresh graduates.
In each
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 year, the numbers of fresher always increase.
Then
, many companies prefer to choose them rather than the professional
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. It happens because
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recent graduates easily
to
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mold
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due to
 they know nothing.
Consequently
, the companies only give
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work
opportunities
 to
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fresh graduates. For all these reasons, all competent people prefer to leave their home country to get a better chance. Taking into consideration all these causes, stopping a brain drain can be constructively organized. In the future, there will be a rule on salary,
such
 as giving extra pay to those who put high dedication and effort
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 their job.
Additionally
, the
labor
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 market can expand
their
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job
opportunities
 so that the potency of professionals can be optimized.
Furthermore
, to overcome these problems, the country should construct an environment for
high-skilled
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the high-skilled
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employee
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employees
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 which can help the
skillful
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 workers to develop their own
capability
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capabilities
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.
To conclude
,
this
 scenario happens because of many reasons,
such
 as low income and lack of job
opportunities
 and better salary and high
opportunities
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 preventive solutions to overcome these challenges
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