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Some people belive that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision-making process. Other people believe that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A handful of
individuals
 opine that broadcasting has a strong effect on a person's choice in order to purchase something;
however
 ,others think that it has little impact on them whenever they buy something. I agree with the former viewpoint
this
 is an attempt to delineate both the conflicting views
along with
 my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs. There are some reasons why a number of
individuals
 believe that announcements have no real impact on a person's decision-making
while
 buying items. The predominant one is that in
this
 modern era, numerous
individuals
 do not opine in broadcastings as they are already aware of fake
advertisements
. As everyone knows
that
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most of the announcements are shown fake by businessmen. They want to make a profit by selling different
products
 . It would be only possible if they give
advertisements
 and tell about only the benefits of
products
.
However
, owing to various reasons I advocate those who think that broadcasting has a strong influence on the masses for purchasing new
products
 from the market.
Firstly
, companies not only tell about
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the benefits of
products
 but
also
 announce huge discounts on items through broadcasting by which a plethora of
individuals
encourage
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are encouraged
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 to buy
products
 from shops. A survey conducted by the BBC( British Broadcast Corporation) demonstrated that 65% of customers
fostered
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were encouraged
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 to purchase as they were influenced by
advertisements
 which were given by businessmen and they announced huge discounts on
products
. In conclusion,
although
 a myriad of the masses think that broadcasting has no effect on people purchasing something, I am in favour of those who opine that
advertisements
 have an impact on the masses for purchasing any item.
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task response
Work on providing a balanced discussion of both views and ensure that your opinion is clearly stated in the introduction and/or conclusion.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer awareness
  • targeted marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • impulsive purchases
  • pervasive
  • brand loyalty
  • perceived needs
  • discerning consumer
  • information overload
  • ad fatigue
  • skepticism
  • persuasive elements
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