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The chart compares average figures for temperature and precipitation over the course of a calendar year in Kolkata.

The chart compares average figures for temperature and precipitation over the course of a calendar year in Kolkata.
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The given graph gives information on the average
temperature
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 and
precipitation
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 each month in a year in
Kolkata
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.
Overall
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, the month which has the largest amount of
precipitation
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 is July followed by August. The gap between the biggest
figure
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 for
precipitation
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 and the lowest
figure
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 for
that is
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 relatively wide compared to the
temperature
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. When it comes to
temperature
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, it is the highest
on
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in
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 May. Looking at the graph more closely, the
precipitation
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 increases gradually between January and May and it goes up
exponetially
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exponentially
 reaching nearly 250mm in June.
Kolkata
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 has the biggest amount of
precipitation
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 at nearly 325mm and 320mm respectively
on
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 July and August. Between November and April,
Kolkata
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 has quite lower
percipitation
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precipitation
 than the
figure
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 for July, which stays at from 50mm to 10mm. Regarding
temperature
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,
Kolkata
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 has the highest
temperature
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on
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in
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 May recording around 30
dgrees
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degrees
. From March to October,
the
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a
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 similar
temperature
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 is maintained in the region.
However
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, the
figure
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 for
temperature
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start
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 decreasing from November and it
remain
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remains
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 until February marking about 20 degrees. The gap between the highest
temperature
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 and the lowest
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that
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apply
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is only 10 degrees.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, precipitation, kolkata, figure, mm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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