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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words.
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The presented above chart provides Information about the frequency of fast
food
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 consumption by US citizens, specifically in restaurants, in the period of time from 2003 to 2013 respectively.
To begin
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 with, It is essential to emphasise that the data changed dramatically in the given period of time, namely
during
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over
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 10 years.
It is clear that
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 the lowest plethora of
people
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, who consumed fast
food
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 every day, was in 2006 and 2007 respectively, the figure for that
people
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 was approximately 2.5%, which is virtually equal to citizens who have never eaten fast
food
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 in the same years. Generally, the most substantial number of constant consumption of junk
food
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, namely once a week, was in 2013 and 2006 respectively, when in the former year
people
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 could allow themselves to eat it not as frequently – once or twice a week. The number of citizens was almost 35%. To delve into other proportions, It is truly understandable that the largest number of
people
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, namely 20%, who bought junk
food
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 several times a week, was in 2006, notwithstanding in 2013 it had fallen to almost 5% minus.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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