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many people still believe that riding a bicycle is the best way to get to places. what are the advantages and disadvantages of using the bicycle these days?

#people #bicycle #places
A century ago,
bicycles
was
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a
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 main medium to commute
one
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 place to another. Some people still consider a
two wheeler
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 without
engine
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 is best to go from one place to another. In
this
 essay, I will explore the pros and cons of using a
bicycle
 in the era of
automobile
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 and try to draw some conclusions. I will start
start
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by looking at
advantages
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the advantages
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. One of the major plus points of using
bicycle
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 nowadays is the fact that it helps you to keep fit and active. Millions of people are under obesity these days which
further
 leads to the health issues
such
 as sugar, diabetes and so on. Clearly, using
bicycle
everyday
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 keep them healthy and helps to fight
with
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diseases.
Secondly
,
use
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the use
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 of
bicycle
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bicycles
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 keeps our
surrounding
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surroundings
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 clean and pollution free because
it
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they
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operators
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 without
the
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engine which contaminates our precious environment.
However
,
bicycles
 do not
use
 any type of fuel which is harmful
for
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environment
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the environment
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand,
bicycles
is
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 only useful for
short distance
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short-distance
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 trips in
this
fast paced
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 world where everyone
have
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 a hectic schedule and
shortage
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a shortage
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 of time.
For instance
, a person who
cover
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 the 20 km distance on
regular
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a regular
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 basis to reach
to
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the
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work cannot
use
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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. Another disadvantage of not using
two-wheeler
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a two-wheeler
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 without
engine
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an engine
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 is that the number of automobiles on
roads
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the roads
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give
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 a hard time
to
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bicycle
 rider to operate on
roads
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the roads
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. In simple words,
roads
 are not meant to drive
bicycles
 nowadays in most counties. Clearly, everyone is left with the option of using cars and bikes.
To conclude
, there are both positives and negatives of using
bicycles
. In spite of the fact that the
use
 of
bicycle
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bicycles
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 is good for health and makes the environment pollution-free, many people find it difficult because of less time and not having accurate
roads
.
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