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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successul person?

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accomplishment is the key to prosperity and substance. Money is required to fulfil for day to day life activities.some people judge that success is the only action to measure wealth. I strongly disagree with
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 opinion. I will explore the topic of triumph in subsequent paragraphs.
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 , the term victory totally depends on each individual. some people believe the happiness in getting material belongings
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 on every birthday young children except materialistic gifts as their practice of achievement but when they grew up and score a high rank in universities
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 getting a scholarship that's a different form of their accomplishment.
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, an employee works his entire life with a company and expects in retirement, the company would present a lifetime pension facility with an award that's a manner of happiness in terms of wealth
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 tangible. on the other ,hand an athlete works hard for an Olympic game and won a medal
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 of getting any wealthy compensation he or she won a medal which considers materialistic but that's their individual part of prosperity. Benefits cannot be measured in terms of money. A poor person getting any sort of cash makes him give a successful feeling as compared to any rich individual who rather not cares about a big fat amount of money. In my experience rather than making big plans and setting short plans to achieve weekly goals make more successful in the world. In conclusion, it is an illusion that has been created by some people that accomplishment is only defined in terms of who has big cars and houses, on the temporary side benefit has no weightage for making
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 perfect goals.
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, gain from any task affects the factor of luxury.
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