Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money discuss both views.
Nowadays, few individuals
feels
it is necessary for members of a family to lavish their income on family celebrations and some others think it's a waste of resources. Change the verb form
feel
This
essay will discuss more on both views and elaborate on a view with a reasonable conclusion.
On Linking Words
one
hand, it is good to spend on family funfair Correct article usage
the one
parties
especially when there is an event that's usually celebrated once in a lifetime Use synonyms
such
as wedding Linking Words
parties
. People believe that wedding ceremonies Use synonyms
comes
once in a lifetime and if not we'll Change the verb form
come
celebrated
now, they will have no other opportunity to do so later in the future, so in a bid to make the family happy, they spend Change the verb form
celebrate
every
of their earnings to the Change the determiner
every one
each
last
on Linking Words
such
party. Linking Words
In addition
to that, a pregnant woman who has waited for years before giving birth to a child will Linking Words
also
plan a very elaborate celebration for the entire family and friends because it is seen as a way of appreciating God for the miracle.
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On the other hand
, some people Linking Words
sees
all Change the verb form
see
this
as wastage because some get themselves involved in loans and even emptying their bank savings in other to make their Linking Words
parties
an elaborate one. Use synonyms
Also
, few Linking Words
person
Change to a plural noun
people
also
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spend
all their earnings on Change the verb form
spends
parties
just because they want to show off their wealth or probably because they don't want to be seen as being a poor fellow, so they do everything in their power to make their celebration a talk of town affair Use synonyms
for instance
, a person who loves attending friends' party Linking Words
such
as wedding ceremonies to see how the couples are dressed, the event Linking Words
center
used and how the guest Change the spelling
centre
are
being taken care of would want to do same during her own Change the verb form
is
also
, not minding if Linking Words
this
people she wants to follow after has the capacity or not and after the whole funfair, they now go back to the repayment of loans which might even cause troubles in the home as the amount that would be earned Linking Words
at the end
of the month might not be enough to sustain the family.
In conclusion, Linking Words
over spending
on family celebrations is not a good idea because Correct your spelling
overspending
their
are other better things the money can be channelled into which will Replace the word
there
also
benefit the family positively rather than doing things to please the masses by feeding them during funfair activities.Linking Words
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