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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
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The bar chart and table demonstrate the income and average weekly working
hours
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 for several occupations in the UK. In general, it can be seen that in the UK, most professions gain a wage raise after three years of experience
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 there is a significant gap in average weekly working
hours
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 among careers, with teachers and firefighters having substantially higher weekly working
hours
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 than underground drivers. Regarding
to
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the bar chart, underground drivers
recieve
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receive
 the highest starting income of 50,000
pounds
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 and a salary increase to nearly 51,000
pounds
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 after three years. Nurses,
on the other hand
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, have the lowest earnings, starting at around 17,000
pounds
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 and rising to over 19,000
pounds
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 after three years. Police officer's salaries remain relatively stable during the three-year period, hovering around 22,000
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pounds
points
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According to
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 the statistic in the table, teachers and firefighters spend the most weekly
hours
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 at work, both averaging 55
hours
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 per week.
In contrast
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, underground drivers put in the lowest
hours
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 per week, clocking in at just 36
hours
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 on average.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, pounds with synonyms.
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