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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries(france, spain, turkey, germany) from 1970 to 2010

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries(france, spain, turkey, germany) from 1970 to 2010
The chart illustrates how much
fruit
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 was produced in four nations between 1970 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the amount of
fruit
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 produced in Spain and Germany was a downward trend
while
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 France and Turkey saw an upward trend.
Additionally
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, Spain was the largest
fruit
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 production during the period. In the first decade, the data on
fruit
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 manufacture in Spain started at 5.5
million
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tonnes
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then
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this
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 figure peaked at 6 before falling significantly to 5
at the end
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.
While
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 the amount of
fruit
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 production in Turkey stood at 2
million
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tonnes
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 after that, there was the highest point of 3.5 until 2010. In the twenty years, the amount of
fruit
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 production in France started at almost 1
million
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tonnes
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after
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this
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 figure increased dramatically to 2.25. Followed by a fluctuation of nearly 2 and approximately 3 from 1990 to 2010.
In contrast
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, the data for
fruit
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 manufacture in Germany stood at 2.5
million
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tonnes
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 after decreasing considerably to nearly 1.5 in 2010

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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