Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Traditional
medicine
is quite popular today, and many Use synonyms
people
try to get healthy with alternative Use synonyms
medicine
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instead
of visiting a Linking Words
doctor
. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will describe whether Linking Words
this
is a positive or negative development.
Health is essential to all Linking Words
people
. Many Use synonyms
people
try hard to get a fit body and find a cure for their illness. In the modern area, many treatments are offered. One of the famous Use synonyms
one
is traditional techniques, they claimed it is more healthy because the main ingredients that they Change to a plural noun
ones
use
are plants based, Use synonyms
they
can cure Correct word choice
and they
people
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a
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apply
such
as Linking Words
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use
of water, pressure, and sound. Add an article
the use
Furthermore
, Linking Words
Indonesia
has many traditional methods for many illnesses. Use synonyms
For example
, in Java, if someone suffers from gallbladder the therapist will give a recipe to find some Linking Words
herbs
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such
as lemongrass, lemon, and tamarin. All the ingredients are boiled and used as a drink for some time. Linking Words
Moreover
, to go to the Linking Words
doctor
, Use synonyms
people
need to pay money, and it is not cheap. Use synonyms
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people
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doctor
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choice
and go to Add an article
a choice
the choice
traditional
healer. Add an article
a traditional
the traditional
This
is a good development because Linking Words
Use synonyms
Indonesia
Correct your spelling
Indonesian
people
can Use synonyms
use
some local Use synonyms
herbs
to cure Use synonyms
disease
without Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
harm
the animals and less side Wrong verb form
harming
effect
.
On Fix the agreement mistake
effects
other
hand, alternative treatment is not Correct article usage
the other
clinical
tested. Replace the word
clinically
People
sometimes just Use synonyms
use
Use synonyms
herbs
without precise Use synonyms
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
and
caused some symptoms like dizziness or stomach ache. For illustrate, recently Correct word choice
which
Use synonyms
Indonesia
news reported a pregnant woman Correct your spelling
Indonesian
is
died because of drinking Unnecessary verb
apply
herbs
made of the local root Use synonyms
herbs
. Old Use synonyms
people
said it is good and giving birth will be easier. But because they did not know how much they needed, they Use synonyms
use
more than enough and caused the worst effect. Traditional Use synonyms
medicine
needs more clinical research to make it safe for everyone.
In my honest opinion, I strongly agree Use synonyms
that is
a good development. I am one of the Linking Words
people
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Use synonyms
use
a traditional treatment and it Correct pronoun usage
who use
was
works. Alternative Unnecessary verb
apply
medicine
is great because uses Use synonyms
herbs
and its effect is less than a medical Use synonyms
doctor
. Traditional treatment Use synonyms
become
Change the verb form
becomes
more great
if some research Replace the words
greater
support
it. Not just cheap but friendly to all ages.Change the verb form
supports
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