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Water pollution has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What causes water pollution? How can we prevent this problem?

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In today's
world
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 it is common to see that a
lot
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 of countries face the problem of
water
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 pollution. There are a
lot
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 of factories that throw away their exhaust fumes in the
water
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. In
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 I will discuss the reasons for
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 pollution and suggest some ways how to solve them. Nowadays
people
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 build and open a
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 of new places,
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 as technology or engineering factories, which produce fumes that affected not only the air but the
water
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 too.
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, some technical equipment can produce chemical things that are very dangerous and poisonous, so
water
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 inhabitants will die because of breathing them. I think the way how factories can reduce their negative impact on
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 is by cleaning from dirty substances. On top of that,
people
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 enjoy having a rest near the sea, rivers or lakes. Usually,
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 entertainment supports eating a
lot
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 of food which is packed in plastic bags. After having a great time,
people
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 tend to leave their rubbish or just throw it away in the
water
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. So, we all know that
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 turtles usually eat plastic
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 their confusing plastic bags for jellyfish.
Water
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's inhabitants can not see the difference and will often eat the bag, which gets stuck in their stomachs.
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, they can not breathe and die. In my opinion, we can collect our garbage by ourselves because it does not take a
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 of time but saves plenty of turtle's life.
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, I would like to say that the problem with
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 pollution is increasing every day. Only if
people
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 start to understand that their actions will have a negative impact on their life in the nearest future, the situation can get better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Toxic substances
  • Eutrophication
  • Algae blooms
  • Pathogens
  • Nutrients
  • Organic matter
  • Marine environments
  • Coastal ecosystems
  • Microplastics
  • Food chain
  • Hazardous chemicals
  • Mining activities
  • Industrial waste
  • Agricultural runoff
  • Sewage and wastewater
  • Oil spills
  • Plastic pollution
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