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University students must pay all costs associated with their education, because it benefits mostly them individually rather than the whole society as whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

#university #students #costs #education #society
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Tertiary pupils should pay all
fees
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 which are associated with their academics as it
benefits
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 mostly them individually
instead
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 of the nation. I agree with the given notion up to a large extent ,but I
also
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 opine that it would benefit
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the nation as well. Which will be elaborated
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 the subsequent paragraphs. There are some reasons why a nation can acquire
benefits
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 if
students
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 pay all costs related to their education. The predominant one is that if pupils have cognizance about how to spend
money
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then
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 they could get success in their life by which country could be developed without
money
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 no one can start their business. If anyone wants to commence their business
then
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 they should have skills in
money
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 management in an effective way.
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, it would be fruitful in decreasing health problems as parents could live their life for a long time.They would have not to worry about their children's
fees
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. They can do their business in an effective way and
money
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 can spend on other useful things
instead
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 of
fees
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.
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, owing to numerous reasons why individuals can attain only
benefits
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 if
students
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 manage their
fees
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 by
themself
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.
Firstly
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, when learners pay their
fees
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 by
themself
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, they could know the value of
money
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 and they attain knowledge about how to spend
money
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 on unnecessary things.
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,
students
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 will do more study
as well as
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 more work, for earning
money
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. They could know about how to earn
money
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 by doing a lot of work. It would be beneficial for them in the future. If they lavish their own
money
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, they could do more study for getting high marks. In conclusion, I reiterated that paying all
fees
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 related to a study by
students
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themself
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 can get benefit individually, but I
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 believe that the country can
also
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 attain
benefits
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 if
students
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 pay their
fees
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 by
themself
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