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The Chart below shows the results of a survey of andult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study . The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

The Chart below shows the results of a survey of andult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study . The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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The data illustrates the results of a survey on adolescent
education
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. The first
chart
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 deciphers the reasons for adult
education
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while
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 the second
chart
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 describes how the cost of
education
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 should be shared.
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, in the first ,
chart
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 the most reason why people pursue learning is to link to an interest in a field and to gain more industry-level knowledge and
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 the least is to change their current situations and to meet people from diverse areas.
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, in the other
chart
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 outlines, the cost for a course should be shared by the Individual and Employer more than the taxpayer. The most mature persons' voted in the survey for the reason for
education
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 was
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 an interest in the subject area which is at a whopping 40% and the highest voting it received in the survey
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 increasing knowledge with just a slightly less at 38%.
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, the least reasons people voted for were to change their current situation which was at 12% and to meet new persons' which was the least voted factor at 9% of the
chart
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, the other charts depict the structure of the cost of each course should be shared. The most expenditure should be carried by the Individual themselves which is at 40% of the figure and the employer which is at 35% of the
chart
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,
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 only 25% is allocated to taxpayers' share of to amount of attendance to a course.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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