The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart gives information about the average weekly spending for families in a particular country in the
years
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1968 and 2018.
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, the vast majority of family expenditure was spent on food in 1968, though the statistics declined in 2018.
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, the inverse was true for housing, transport, and leisure, with only household goods remaining constant over the
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. A significantly larger proportion of weekly income went on food in 1968, at 35% which was exactly twice as larger than the figure after five decades. A reverse pattern was seen in the spending on leisure, housing, and transport, showing upward trends from nearly 10% in 1968.
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, expenditure on recreational activities witnessed the most significant increase among the three in 2018, reaching 23%. In marked contrast, other remaining categories either plateaued or declined. In both
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, household goods represented an insignificant of &% of the budget,
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the others all decreased. Among them, the gap in clothing and footwear between the two
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was the most noticeable, which decreased by half, from 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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