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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives
an information
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information
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 that the
number
 of people
visited
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who visited
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an
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the
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island
of
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in
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, in 2017, the total
number
 of tourists, and tourists
by
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apply
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staying both on cruise
ships
 and
an
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on an
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island
 of
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the
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Caribbean
incresed
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increased
 rather
than in
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to
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 2010.
According to
 the line graph, the total
visitors
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number of visitors
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 grew up from
1million
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1 million
 to 3.5
millions
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million
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.
Also
, the
number
 of people who were staying on cruise
ships
 started between 0 and 0.5
millions
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million
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 and it
also
suprisingly
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surprisingly
 reached
to
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apply
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the point of 2
millions
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million
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.
However
, the
tourists
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number of tourists
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 who went to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 by
ships
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ship
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were
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apply
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slightly decreased between 2011 and 2012, from 0.5 to 0.25.
In addition
,
poeple
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people
 who
were
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visited by staying on
island
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the island
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 showed no
differents
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different
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 between 2010 and 2011, it was recorded
0.75
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at 0.75
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millions
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million
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. Plus, it had no
chages
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changes
 from 2013 to 2015, it recorded 1.5
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
, and a little bit declined to 1.25
millions
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million
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, but it bounced to 1.5
millions
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million
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 in 2017. From the graph, the most significantly increased point was the total
number
 of
visitors
 and in
turns
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turn
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,
visitors
 who were staying on cruise
ships
 and
stying
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staying
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 on an
island
.
Moreover
, the least
rises
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rise
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 was seen in
visiotrs
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visitors
by
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apply
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staying on an
island
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, ships, visitors, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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