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You recently did a short cookery courses. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course. Say how much cooking you've done since the course. Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to provide
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 feedback, requested about the cookery class I
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attended at your school. As much as I love eating food, I relish cooking as well. During the course period, there were many areas that I enjoyed. One prominent area was the presentation made by the guest lecturer
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 because it helped me to enhance my knowledge about food nutrition.
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, it assisted me in developing a diet plan, which helped me to achieve my weight goals. Another aspect is the team bonding that was created between all the participants, and it gave me the opportunity to develop my social relationships as well. Since graduating from the course
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 month, I had been cooking three meals a day, but during rainy days, I opt to order food. I prefer relaxing
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with the weather
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 and enjoying
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Indian cuisine at that time.
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, I
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 you can provide a course about preparing delicious desserts
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 because I have seen a huge skill gap
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 in the labour market. I look forward to hearing from you, and if you need any
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 clarification, please do not hesitate to contact me as I will be pleased to assist you. Yours faithfully Isuru Bandara
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