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Some children nowadays take sports seriously while others play sports in their free time . Is this a positive or negative development ?

#children #sports #time #development
There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of playing
sports
 taken seriously by
children
because they want to follow their ideals
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 is ubiquitous and abundant across the globe
due to
 its paramount supreme importance. One school of thought opines that it is worthless ,
However
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 others consider that a couple of problems
also
 occur because of the same .
Although
this
 has a plethora of merits yet numerous demerits are
also
 there which will be elaborated on in upcoming paragraphs . Initiating the best possible benefits the most significant advantage is
sports
 help to improve the health condition .
While
 playing any
sports
children
 provides an opportunity for students to stay physically active .
On the other hand
 ,the government provide special facilities for
sports
 person
such
 as a cricket ground, tennis club etc and
provide
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 a better lifestyle .To cite an example , many
children
 follow their ideals and make their own professions. In cricket ,the most loved person in India is M.S Dhoni. which have a huge fan following.
As a result
 , many people follow their profession to become a cricketer . On the paradoxical contradictory side , there are many drawbacks as well , first and foremost , As we know education is the key to making a man perfect . Many of the
children
 not doing their studies
while
 they follow their
sports
 profession .
Secondly
 , In
this
 modern
world
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 most
children
 prefer online games they don't want to play outdoor
sports
 .
Consequently
 , it is more important for students to perform
sports
 activities , it helps to reduce stress , increase stamina , provide strength etc.
To conclude
 , without any doubt ,
this
 is a mixed bag .If
this
 topic has many positives
then
 the negative points of
this
 notion may not be underestimated .
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