In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes here. What is your opinion about this?

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In recent years, many
people
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realize that with the
development
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of cities in our country, more and more cities are
built
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, but our
countryside
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is vanishing. In my view,
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fast
development
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is important, the preservation of
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countryside
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the countryside
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is more precious and crucial. As we all
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,
city
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expansion has lots of benefits for
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economy
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growth, especially in developing
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countries
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like China. Because more cities can bring more jobs and consumption, which can keep the market
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active. And we did have made really great results.
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thirty years,
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the Pudong
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Area of Shanghai has changed into the most modern icon globally from a normal
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, which we can be proud of,
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Shanghai has been one of the biggest
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city
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cities
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around
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the world.
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development
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is crucial, I think the benefits of
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expansion can not outweigh the bad influences.
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, it can decrease
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's happiness
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life.
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, in
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if we want to get
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with any
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or natural scenery, we have to drive for 2 hours or above, which means our children can not grow up with natural
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and
that is
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unhealthy for growth.
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, for
people
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who always live in the
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, they may dislike
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city
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life, so all these big changes and new constructions may take their normal life or beautiful hometown away.
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, the constant construction can bring air pollution and
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, which not only is bad for the environment, but
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cause really serious
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for
people
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's health, like
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disease. In conclusion,
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fast
development
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plays an important role in our country,
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for a better environment and
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a higher
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index of happiness, I hope we can balance the pros and cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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