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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medincines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

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The issue of working hard or accepting bad situations has been one of the most discussed topics. In my opinion, improving the current situation through working hard or in other ways is indeed beneficial for the future development of
people
,
while
 they can
also
 live in the present moment even in the face of bad situations. The reasons are below. There is no doubt that the current bad situations could affect the development of
people
 especially in the field of
work
, working hard is one of the most efficient ways can help
people
 directly solve the current problems when they are in their previous adverse circumstances.
For example
,
according to
 a study, of more than 78 industry summaries, a large number of citizens can accumulate their
work
 experience or learn a lot of industry field knowledge by themselves to achieve higher income in a few short years.
Thus
, they can prevent them from falling into their previous working states. It is worth encouraging them to get better job opportunities in the future and go to a new environment. From another perspective, for a small number of
people
 who have been working for a
while
,
this
 is bound to be an appropriate choice.
For instance
, many ordinary
people
 choose to
work
 in a company just for stable revenue. It may not be convenient for them to look after their family members if they move to a new
work
 environment for breaking through themselves. They sometimes have to stick to the job to satisfy the daily expenses of the family which are
also
 worthy of approval.
Overall
,
although
 choosing the better environmental situation is a vital choice for humans, I think we still need to consider more about the reality of the moment, both are worth encouraging.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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