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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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There has been an argument on the best method to improve safety on roads
while
 many think the most effective way to do so is to increase the minimum legal
age
 for driving a vehicle , a lot of people disagree with
this
 notion ,
i
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 totally agree that rising the minimum legal
age
 can contribute to fewer hazards on the road as drivers at higher
age
 tend to be more mature and responsible than those of young drivers who sometimes use driving as a source of entertainment which can cause dangers .
To begin
 with , rising the lowest legal driving
age
 can decrease the number of road accidents , as those who are older are more rational and grown up ,
for instance
 , in Saudia
Arabia
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 the slightest legal
age
 for driving has been changed from 16 to 18 to obtain a permanent license ,
although
 it seems like a slight change ,
this
 particular move has lowered fatality rates drastically nationwide.
In addition
, younger drivers look at driving these machines as an activity to do in their free time which is a completely wrong view as cars and motorbikes
are
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 mainly used for transportation,
,
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moreover
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 they do dangerous acts for pleasure ,
for example
, many young individuals are interested in drifting which is a very risky trick performed by cars mostly and has taken so much young drifter's lives
as well as
 people not involved in
this
 action .
to sum up
 , it is evident that road safety would change for the better if the lowest legal
age
 were to increase , that's because
the
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older people turn their
behaviors
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 changes with them
as well as
 it gives them more consideration and discipline towards others , it
also
 means fewer numbers of immature teenagers driving around to pass time and causing troubles and even tragedies with them .
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