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Some people say that ebook and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, digitization has gradually evolved around the world and has made life easy to blend with and in the
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.I partially agree with
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to the public in the long run,the need for journals or articles on
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 will still be considered part of our lives. To commence,there are certain individuals in the economy that will not get accustomed to computers because of their poor sight,
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 some people will adapt to it really fast.
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 ,when considering those disabled people,it means that in the
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 automatic devices and conventional methods of passing or getting information.
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,a survey carried out in the year 2022, shows that 90% of the elderly missed out on details that were paramount about the pandemic because news and entertainment program was only gotten through phones .
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 will exist in the future to facilitate harmony in society by putting the elderly into consideration.
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, machinery can never be totally reliable because it may need a constant source of electricity to keep them functioning which can not be sustainable in the rural areas that do not have access to
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,the possibility that they will be a consistent source of power does not guarantee the longevity of the machines and
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,underdeveloped countries do not have solar or power supply for a long time like African countries .
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 of totally eradicating newspapers and magazines to electronic books ,they will be a mixture of
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 . In conclusion, I partially concur that there will be a total replacement of written news through
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 of them in the upcoming years because of the older citizens and lack of light in some remote areas like Nigeria .

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