Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that education systems
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based upon
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too
much
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academic or
feneral
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general
facts
while
practical
skills
stays
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second
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priority. I totally agree
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this
saying as a man who supports the idea that
skills
should not be ignored. On
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hand,
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all levels of education, even though being very important, there is too much time
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spent on learning facts
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. A student does not matter
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a member of
primary
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a primary
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school
or a university always struggles
while
learning and tends to forget his/her both previous
knowledges
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and
skills
because of not getting enough treatment. To give an example, when I was in technical
school
, we used to have a
cirruculum
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curriculum
that did not have enough experiments after
lessons
. Only one lesson had
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time to make practical
studyings
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studying
that I
am still have
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good
skills
by
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having past experiences about it and it is still sustainable.
On the other hand
, even if it takes time, learning practical
skills
should be the main basis of any educational system. Learners ought to make as much
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and training as they can to understand not only their
lessons
but
also
how to deal with problems.
For instance
, an ordinary primary
school
student learns how to
cumlivate
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cultivate
vegetables in their
lessons
. In case a primary
school
cirruculum
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curriculum
that
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has enough practical
lessons
to support their knowledge with abilities, students become
more handy
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and understand how to grow a tomato
thoroughtly
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thoroughly
. To summarize, any educational system in the world should support practical
skills
as much as learning facts to make our brilliant generation more eligible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual learning systems
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical application
  • project-based learning
  • real-world scenarios
  • retention
  • soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving
  • curriculum
  • fact memorization
  • integrate technology
  • coding
  • digital literacy
  • assessment methods
  • portfolios
  • practical demonstrations
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