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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development

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In recent times,
technology
 has changed how
people
 relate to each other .
This
 essay will expatiate how it has an effect on
people
's relationships with another by making them isolate themselves from friends and how
this
 has become a negative development in
such
 that
people
 do not have the need to share anything with their mates and relevant examples with a logical conclusion will be made.
To begin
,
technology
 has now become something everyone depends on, they prefer to get their answers from the internet rather than sharing
it
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them
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 with appropriate experts that can be of help to them and through that good relationships will be achieved. To illustrate, I nursed a patient to a peaceful death
due to
 the fact that she has been having symptoms for a month and all she did was check online and treating herself, she didn’t have any friends, she prefers being alone and talking through social media than to seek help from
people
 which later endangered her life.
Furthermore
,
this
 has become a negative development in society and the community because Individuals communicate more with their phones and derive joy through the use of
technology
 rather than having friends.
For example
, my neighbour finds it difficult to talk to anyone, most
people
 in the compound did not recognize her, and she is always busy with her phone and always on the internet.
To conclude
,
technology
 has a lot of consequences on how
people
 make their relationships with
people
 and
this
 had become a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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