The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2000

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2000
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The pie graphs describe the moderate household outflows in the year 2010 in two countries, respectively
Japan
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and Malaysia.
It is clear that
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Japanese and Malaysian spent the largest percentage of people's budget on housing, food, and other goods, and services.
In addition
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, the expense of healthcare and transport in
Japan
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was two times the figure for Malaysia. In Malaysian families, the greatest proportion of spending was on the dwelling which took up over a third of the total payment,
while
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it was just over a fifth in
Japan
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. In most Japanese homes, they spent the highest amount of their income on other goods and services, at nearly a third.
Moreover
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, the figure for
this
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category was slightly lower by more than a quarter.
Besides
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, the percentage of the cost of food in these countries was similar, accounting for 24% and 27% of the former and the latter. In both countries, the smallest rate of spending was on health care.
Also
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,
this
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category represented a tiny fraction of the total household expenditure, the formation for transport constituted one in ten in Malaysia. Meanwhile, they doubled in
Japan
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in the quantity of allowance, at 6% and 20%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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