Discuss advantages and disadvantages of watching TV during childhood

Most children in the world are addicted to watching TV at the time of their childhood. There
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, they can claim
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information that was been
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the globe or they can spend their spare time
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doing
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cartoons or movies
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TV , since it's
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • exposure
  • documentaries
  • sedentary
  • childhood obesity
  • socialization
  • parental control
  • age-appropriate
  • creative thinking
  • inappropriate content
  • cultural awareness
  • entertainment value
  • media influence
  • behavioral impact
  • educational programs
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