some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertainment and ecological important. Discuss both views.

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One of the social concerns today relates to the problem keep
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in
zoos
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it is commonly suggested that it is wrong to keep
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in
zoos
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, others believe
zoos
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are both entertainment and ecologically important (In my opinion, when
animals
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are in
zoos
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, it will protect life safety and the development of everything. On the one hand, it is argued by some that
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do wrong because they keep
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in
zoos
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, keeping
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is behaviour wrong because the government have been promulgated laws that must not keep
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to protect
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animals'
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the animals'
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environment
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.
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, a lot of
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keep
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to take advantage
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of them
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find money and do a lot of personal benefits.
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,
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won’t live in
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free
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to it develop.
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example
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, in the outside
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animals
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will go to many new free places but in the
zoos
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,
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must be under the control of
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, they won’t go to many new free places, lose their wild abilities, be far away from fellows, etc,
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,
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, it is strongly believed by others that
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are places that earn extra income for
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. A particularly good
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here is the zoo is a place for tourists to visit and experience including
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earn
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very money and local tourism development.
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, the zoo is a place to protect endangered
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away many bad guys.
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example
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, outside the
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environment
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animals
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can be kept from bad guys but in
zoos
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, they will be protected from
people
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away many bad guys In conclusion, it is wrong to keep
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in
zoos
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, as
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are both entertainment and ecologically important. Personally, I tend to believe that when
animals
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are in
zoos
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, they will protect life safety and the development of everything.
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