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Technology is being used more and more in education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Technology has been considered an asset and an innovative tool in education. It gives new platforms for students to learn
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 in an innovative way where they can see and listen to
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 rather than traditional classroom teachings. It has
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 provided wide learning opportunities like online learning platforms. In the olden
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, people use to learn using books and taught in classrooms by teachers.
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, in the current
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 there are different platforms of learning, like online classes, smart classes and recorded classrooms. These give options to choose from based on the student's availability and have made education much easier.
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, recorded classes are helpful for students to attend sessions based on their availability and free time. So a student doing part-time work can spend his free time on studies without missing any lectures.
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 some disadvantages to the innovation of technology. Children these
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 just rely on the Internet for completing their assignments and spent less time in the library enhancing their knowledge. The usage of online mathematical tools and calculators has
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 affected one's capacity to do calculations in mind and remember
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, universities these
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 have to make compulsory plagiarism checking as students just copy
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 from internet resources.
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, technology is useful as it has made studying more convenient at the fingertips ,
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 it has
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 affected the human capacity of remembering
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 and interests in books.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-learning
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia resources
  • online collaboration
  • virtual classrooms
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • learning management systems
  • adaptive learning
  • screen time
  • tech-savvy
  • cyberbullying
  • digital equity
  • edtech (educational technology)
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