Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The world has become a global village after the industrial revolution. Different Nations are having many similarities with each other
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having access to whatever they need regardless of their geographical situation. In
this
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essay, I will explain in detail why I believe
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phenomenon is a positive development for human beings.
Firstly
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,
global
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village means merging the whole world together and
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it into a small village
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in which
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everybody knows each other and can connect easily.
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E-commerce
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business is one
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greatest opportunities that
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development brings to us.
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evolutionary improvement is beneficial for people all over the world
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because it reduced the distances between locals in several countries from the other sides of the earth irrespective of their location. To be more specific, I will exemplify iPhone, as a product which is made
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USA
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the USA
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, assembled
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China, and sold everywhere, even in deprived cities.
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, another
benefits
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of being similar in any
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of life is that people can learn much new information online. It does not necessary to be in a specific place to learn anything new.
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, you can easily have
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access to numerous traits and
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to
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various classes just by a simple click on your
smart phones
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and after finishing your course, your degree can be downloaded from the websites of your classes’ institutes. In conclusion, there are many positive aspects
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this
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phenomenon and it brings opportunities to the young generation, but we should be cautious about how to use them properly to not be exposed to abuse.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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