Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The world has become a global village after the industrial revolution. Different Nations are having many similarities with each other
due to
having access to whatever they need regardless of their geographical situation. In
this
essay, I will explain in detail why I believe
this
phenomenon is a positive development for human beings.
Firstly
,
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village means merging the whole world together and
transform
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it into a small village
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everybody knows each other and can connect easily.
For example
,
E-commerce
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business is one
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greatest opportunities that
this
development brings to us.
This
evolutionary improvement is beneficial for people all over the world
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because it reduced the distances between locals in several countries from the other sides of the earth irrespective of their location. To be more specific, I will exemplify iPhone, as a product which is made
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USA
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, assembled
by
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China, and sold everywhere, even in deprived cities.
Secondly
, another
benefits
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of being similar in any
aspects
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of life is that people can learn much new information online. It does not necessary to be in a specific place to learn anything new.
For instance
, you can easily have
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access to numerous traits and
enroll
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to
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various classes just by a simple click on your
smart phones
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and after finishing your course, your degree can be downloaded from the websites of your classes’ institutes. In conclusion, there are many positive aspects
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this
phenomenon and it brings opportunities to the young generation, but we should be cautious about how to use them properly to not be exposed to abuse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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