In their advertising, bussinesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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recent production can be explained as a method to acquire mass attention. Psychology studies agree that
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of societies can have a notion that new things are able to do exceptionally, morever, purchasing the new one can make them avoid
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to purchase their outputs.
For instance
, as a housewife, my mother purchases recent technologies in view of they do not have
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which are caused by daily routines. Turning to my paradigm, it is more beneficial if sellers should explain to clients about
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of their
products
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are fresh from production. The proposed action can assist customers to maximize of using the purchased
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. Another way to obliterate
this
issue is by regulating rules to make manufacturers detail honestly their outputs in advertisements.
As a result
, citizens cannot feel that they have bought useless items.
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keen on their item
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