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In their advertising, bussinesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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 moment, there is a new trend in selling which is some corporations advertise that their items are new. As a way to explain
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 is not a positive development which will be detailed later.
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recent production can be explained as a method to acquire mass attention. Psychology studies agree that
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 of societies can have a notion that new things are able to do exceptionally, morever, purchasing the new one can make them avoid
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, multitudinous companies will initiate the previous trend in order to persuade
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 to purchase their outputs.
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, as a housewife, my mother purchases recent technologies in view of they do not have
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 which are caused by daily routines. Turning to my paradigm, it is more beneficial if sellers should explain to clients about
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 of their
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 rather than representing that
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 are fresh from production. The proposed action can assist customers to maximize of using the purchased
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. Another way to obliterate
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, citizens cannot feel that they have bought useless items.
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keen on their item
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 many people will buy recent
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