The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced.
The diagram illustrates the way in which leather
products
are produced.
Overall
, the process consists of ten stages, beginning with the animal skin and ending with some leather goods.
Initially
, animal shell serves as the main raw material in the process of producing these products
such
as handbags, a pair of shoes and balls and you name it. Once the animal's skin has been dried, a vehicle is brought to the factory. After
this
process, the materials are washed with water and lime. Prior to flattening, agin the animal skin is soaked in lime. For more cleaning, vegetable matter adds to water and then
the materials are soaked in it , this
stage is called tannin. Following
this
, tannin is polished . In the subsequent stage, it is sent to a factory. Finally
, the raw materials are prepared to produce some kinds of products
. Companies want a factory in which leather products
will be produced according to
their customers.Submitted by sajedeh.khaledi1 on
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